Black Gold Stiff
Black Gold Stiff
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 New Adams Idea Pro Forged Wedge 5008 Black Gold Stiff Flex  US $39.99
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 ADAMS IDEA PRO IRONS 3 PW 8 PC TRUE TEMPER BLACK GOLD STEEL X STIFF 050 US $31.02
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 CLEVELAND CG12 BLACK PEARL 60 LOB WEDGE DYNAMIC GOLD STEEL STIFF US $.99
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 CLEVELAND CG10 BLACK PEARL 60 LOB WEDGE DYNAMIC GOLD STEEL STIFF US $.99
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 CLEVELAND CG16 TOUR BLACK PEARL 7 IRON STIFF DYNAMIC GOLD S300 VERY GOOD US $9.98
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 LEFT HANDED NIKE SV TOUR BLACK SATIN WEDGE SALE PRICE US $62.85
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 Titleist Original DCI Black Single 2 Iron Dynamic Gold S300 Steel Stiff US $39.99
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 Adams Idea Pro Forged PW Pitching Wedge Black Gold Steel Stiff US $49.99
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 NIKE SV BLACK 56 SAND WEDGE 14 BOUNCE DYNAMIC GOLD S400 STEEL STIFF US $32.49
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 Adams Idea Pro Forged Single 5 Iron Black Gold Steel Stiff US $24.99
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 PING Eye 2 XG Wedge Black Dot Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff SAND 56LEFTLHLK US $99.99
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 Adams Idea Pro Forged Single 6 Iron Black Gold Steel Extra Stiff US $24.99
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 Adams Idea Pro Forged Single 6 Iron Black Gold Steel Stiff US $24.99
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 Ping S57 Single Demo 7 Iron BLACK Dot True Temper Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Flex US $29.95
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 Ping S57 Single Demo 7 Iron BLACK Dot True Temper Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff US $29.95
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 PING Irons S57 Iron Set Black Dot Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Flex 3 PTALL 1 2 US $399.99
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 Ping S57 Single Demo 7 Iron Black Dot Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Flex RH US $24.95
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 Nice Srixon I 506 6 iron TT Black Gold steel shaft stiff flex w training grip US $50.00
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 Titleist DCI 762 Black Triangle 6 Iron Stiff Flex Dynamic Gold S 300 Steel US $4.99
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 Cleveland CMM CG4 6 Iron Tour Black Gold Steel Stiff US $19.90
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 Titleist DCI Black 6 Iron Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Steel Shaft US $39.90
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 Titleist DCI Black Triangle 4 Iron Original Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Steel Shaft US $39.90
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 Titleist DCI Black Triangle 3 Iron Original Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Steel Shaft US $29.90
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 PING ZING BLACK DOT 4 PW IRON SET DYNAMIC GOLD STIFF STEEL USED RH IRONS US $179.99
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 Ping ISI Nickel 3 PW Black Dot Iron Set Aldila Tour Gold Extra Stiff Graphite US $325.00
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 Titleist DCI Black 5 Iron Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Steel US $39.90
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 Titleist DCI 762 Black Triangle 6 Iron Stiff Flex Dynamic Gold Lite S 300 Steel US $4.99
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 ADAMS IDEA PRO 9 IRON BLACK GOLD STIFF STEEL WINN GRIP US $25.49
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 Nice Ping i15 7 iron black dot Dynamic Gold steel shaft stiff flex std std US $60.00
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 NIKE GOLF SV BLACK MILLED LOB WEDGE 58 10 STEEL STIFF TT DYNAMIC GOLD OIL LOOK US $39.99
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 Tommy Armour 845 Gunmetal black irons 5 PW Dynamic Gold S300 stiff shafts US $159.99
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 Cleveland 588P Black Oxide Pitching Wedge Dynamic Gold Stiff Steel Shaft US $69.90
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 Titleist DCI Black 6 Iron Stiff S300 Dynalite Gold Steel FROM A SET Very Nice US $19.99
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 TITLEIST DCI BLACK 990 DYNAMIC GOLD S300 STIFF 9 IRON US $45.00
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 TITLEIST DCI BLACK 990 DYNAMIC GOLD S300 STIFF 3 IRON US $45.00
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 TITLEIST DCI BLACK 990 DYNAMIC GOLD S300 STIFF 4 IRON US $45.00
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 Titleist DCI OS 7 Iron Gold S300 Stiff OS Black US $69.90
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 Cleveland CG16 Tour Black Pearl Single 3 Iron Dynamic Gold S300 Steel Stiff US $89.99
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 Adams Idea Pro Forged Single 8 Iron Black Gold X Stiff US $49.99
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 TITLEIST DCI BLACK 962 DYNAMIC GOLD S300 STEEL STIFF SHAFT 5 IRON US $22.99
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 Ping Eye 2 Black Dot 8 iron golf club with steel Dynamic Gold stiff shaft US $39.00
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 Ping Eye 2 Copper BeCu Sand Wedge Black dot wedge with Steel Stiff Dynamic gold US $119.00
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 Nike SV Tour Black 60 10 60° LW Lob Wedge Dynamic Gold S400 Steel Stiff US $14.99
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 Adams Idea Black CB2 Forged Single 8 Iron Dynalite Gold S300 Steel Stiff US $69.99
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 PING Eye 2 XG Wedge Black Dot Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff SAND 56 US $84.99
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 PING Eye 2 XG Wedge Black Dot Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff LOB L 60 CLEAN US $99.99
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 Titleist DCI Black Triangle Pitching P Wedge Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff Steel US $59.90
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 Adams Idea Pro Forged Single 9 Iron Black Gold Stiff US $49.99
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 Cleveland CG1 Black Pearl Single 4 Iron Dynamic Gold X100 Steel Extra Stiff US $34.99
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 Cleveland CG16 Tour Black Pearl 7 Iron Steel Stiff 34 1 2 Dynamic Gold LEFT US $39.99
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 Adams Golf Idea Pro Gold Black Pitching Wedge Only New Wedge stiff steel 2 US $32.00
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 RH Cleveland Tour Action 588 Diadic Black 53 Wedge Dynamic Gold Steel Stiff US $49.99
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 PING S57 7 IRON BLACK DOT DYNAMIC GOLD S300 STEEL STIFF US $49.00
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 Titleist Vokey SM4 Black Nickel Wedge 56 TT Dynamic Gold X100 Steel X Stiff US $90.25
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 BRIDGESTONE GOLF J36 BLADE 6 IRON w BLACK GOLD STIFF STEEL US $19.99
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 CLEVELAND CG16 TOUR BLACK PEARL 3 PW IRONS STIFF STEEL DYNAMIC GOLD VERY GOOD US $274.99
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 PING EYE 2 3 PW IRON SET w True Temper Black Gold Stiff US $159.99
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 Cleveland CG Black 3 PW Iron Set RH Dynamic Gold S300 Stiff US $999.95
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 CLEVELAND CG16 TOUR BLACK PEARL SINGLE 7 IRON STIFF Dynamic Gold S300 VERY GOOD US $39.99
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Would you comment on this poem?
If I close my eyes, I could see inside,
walls covered with blood, still as no wind
Old vines coil round my heart
Pulling, spilling tears through open air
The cries echo, fly away, above
Screeching now, torturing my mind
Most of my life now painted deep black
But seeing colored things, I smile
Missing that dreamily day of gold
Finding sleep hard to catch in the grasp
Chase me, a blue bird that stole my scream
Chase me with no destined end
I try to hide, winds flow, keep me back
Now laying stiff, stuck, to the ground.
Hearing the sound of my cracking heart.
I want to offer some grammatical corrections first
* = corrections
If I close my eyes, I can* see inside,
walls covered with blood, still as no wind
Old vines coil round my heart
Pulling, spilling tears through open air
The cries echo, fly away, above
Screeching now, torturing my mind
Most of my life now painted deep black
But seeing colored things, I smile
Missing *dreamily *that day of gold
Finding sleep hard to catch in the grasp
Chase me, a blue bird that stole my scream
Chase me with no destined end
I try to hide, winds flow, keep me back
Now laying stiff, stuck, to the ground.
Hearing the sound of my cracking heart.
The poem has potential but I would not be satisfied with it as a complete piece
some room for improvement is there